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Staring at the earth thinking of peoples quashed dreams .
Squashed teens as i am hearing the feeble screams.
Blind to the evil schemes junkies and needle fiends.
Serotonin is the bodies pleasure flask.
Like a treasure stash to smile like chesire cats.
But junkies are like pirates who out measured the task.
So for lessons in power, Fuck adolescent with cower.
Because unlike a flower they leave an essence of sour.
Levitating a toaster messing near the shower.

The Suicide hour….. Like ending on a rope.
He says the rehabilitation is sending no hope.
Their defending the dope. Rebinding the slope.
So he walk in junkie, And crawls out an addict.
His puffed up an of the rail.. cuffed up and off to jail.
Eyes bagged veins sore….. His fucked up and often frail.
For more detail… His weight down like a snail.

needs a lot of work
5/10

One comment

  1. Gifted Genetics says:

    needs a lot of work
    5/10
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